10.23.2008

Description of Myself

Brown and blonde alternate in the hair that falls just to the shoulder-no farther. The wide blue eyes screen the inside of her lids, as if expecting the answer to life to be within her. The fingernails are scratched up and vary -- bitten, unbitten -- as though there is a pattern to the nerves. The back of the left hand is adorned with first a stick-on tattoo then an orange outlining of the fake moon, smiling in sleep. Both wrists are covered in woven bracelets that were taught in elementary school and hair ties in case inspiration strikes. The middle finger of the left hand wears a rusting skull ring, crowned king of the dead. The too-long arms hang the equally long fingers to the middle of the thighs. The torso seems improperly proportioned in comparison to the mile-long legs that are muscled for a long-distance runner. Both legs are covered in scratched-at bug bites, the right adorned with a long scar, the left with a slight indentation from a girl scouts incident. The toenails are covered in black nail polish, almost obsessively. The large toes have long nails, while the others are cut short. The right ankle clutches to two string anklets, woven like the bracelets, made of red, grey, white, yellow, pink, and green. The green anklet is more worn and larger than the red one, as though older. The pinky toe is decorated with a ring on special occasions. The posture is as though the string that should be held taught has been left on vacation. Her body is concealed with a purple tank top and jeans, her comfy clothes that make it out of the house and into school. Her feet are clad in either clunky black shoes or boots. Her face wears a smile, contradicting her macabre clothing.

4 comments:

Penn Wise said...

I loved this piece! It was soooo descriptive, yet none of the description seemed cliche. You described yourself so well that I felt like I could see you standing right there in front of me. like you said your image contradicts your personality in some ways which I think really showed in your writing and made it unique.

Anastasia said...

The description in this piece was amazing. I had a crystal clear image of you in my head after I read it. I also really liked the point of view of the piece. The piece was written by you, yet it was written as though you were writing about another person (does that make any sense?!). I agree with Penn that it showed your personality and your writing style. The piece was well done!

Chaviess said...

The attention given to detail is almost overwhelming, but in a good way. I had to read some of the line twice to connect the full image. The detail indirectly shows so much personality. I love it when a detail like woven bracelets and a skull ring illustrates a personality trait.

Rachel said...

You know how you like to see yourself and how you want other to see you, and it definitely comes through in this piece. The description gets a little tangled in some places, but overall the description was detailed and engaging. I would like to see it flow a little better, but as it is it's really good. I see you. It is so hard to write an accurate self portrait, and you really achieved the image. great success.