Our lives are all intertwined
with each others
and even with ourselves.
Some of us wear thorns on the outside
to defend from pain,
or more truly
to hide from the possibility
of imperfections.
We all have petals that we will lose,
that will take away from our outer beauty,
but we also have leaves that will reappear
and remind us
of our inner youth.
There is confusion, speed, and directionless direction
imbedded through our stems.
Our color can fade and rejuvenate with our emotions,
but despite it all,
the fear, the joy, the hate, the perplexities, and depravities
we are all beautiful
just like the rose that may prick our finger, and make us bleed,
only to remind us
we are alive.
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I loved the extended metaphors/similes that you used throughout this poem!!! They were completely original and kept me wanting to read more to see what new idea you would have next and what comparisons you would use. I also loved the line breaks you used that caused the poem to read really well and easily. Good Job! This poem was amazing!!
I loved the extended metaphors/similes that you used throughout this poem!!! They were completely original and kept me wanting to read more to see what new idea you would have next and what comparisons you would use. I also loved the line breaks you used that caused the poem to read really well and easily. Good Job! This poem was amazing!!
I really liked this poem. I really like the metaphors about wearing thorns on the outside and the references about losing pedals. I really liked the ending and thought it was really well done.
This poem was an awesome way to relate human feeling and nature. You used all aspects of Sarah's project to describe a person's pain and emotions. Nice metaphors. There is alot of feeling in this poem. Awesome job!:)
On the first read of this poem I was thinking, oh great, another poem about roses and love. But you deceived me. The extended metaphor was, not only consistent, but real. I didn't feel like you contrived this, but let it flow. I am always looking to understand your wisdom, and I know that this is, without a doubt, a display of your developed perception of humanity. Thank you for sharing this with us. It is your voice.
Metaphors used were beautifully illustrated. I loved how we, the reader, can take these metaphors, and apply them to ourselves as perhaps life lessons or concepts. My favorite line- “just like the rose that may prick our finger, and make us bleed, only to remind us we are alive.”
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